The Fallen (H.P) UNDER EDITING

TITLE:               The Fallen (H.P) UNDER EDITING

AUTHOR:         Phe-Drago - @_Phoenix_Aqua_

SOURCE:          Wattpad - https://www.wattpad.com/story/212132522-the-fallen-h-p-under-editing

STATUS:            Completed

TAGS:                 #dracomalfoy #drarry #harrypotter #harrypotterandtheorderofthephoenix #harrypotterandthephilosophersstone #hermionegranger #hogwartsschoolofwitchcraftandwizardry #lunalovegood #nevilelongbottom #ronweasley #wbwl

ADDIONATAL TAGS:          #AlternateUniverse #CharacterBashing #CharacterDeath #Twins

SUMMARY:

Harry had a twin. His name was Godric Evan Potter and on that faithful Halloween night, was declared as the Chosen One.

6 people go missing a few years later but no one noticed. When the 5th year starts, Dumbledore recruits help from The Fallen. When their identities get revealed, will the Wizarding World learn their biggest mistake?

COMPLETED 6/27/2020 (27/6/2020)

Highest Ranks: 1# WBWL HOT 6/28/2020

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RATING:          6/10

REVIEW:

The story has great potential but I guess the Author wasn't that experienced. The story was written well but plot-wise, it was quite lacking.

There is a major mistake in the characters. Around the end of chapter 4 or at chapter 5, Harry's twin's name actually changed from Godric to Hadrian which was maintained up to the end. I was also confused about drastic behavioral changes in the characters without much explanation or hints why they did so. I would guess that it was brought forth by the lack of structure or planning. With this also come the plot holes. If I am guessing right, there are actually quite a lot. A lot of events or characters brought question marks to my head.

The ending was also a bit of a cliffhanger to give way to a sequel which I believe was really really dark. As it is said in the summary, "The members of The Fallen slowly start suiciding until it's only Rosalie Evelyn Potter (Harry's apprentice) left." And the sequel was last updated on July 01, 2020, along with her other stories were also mostly last updated in May of 2020. So I would guess that it was either abandoned or on hiatus. Though it gave a conclusion to the war with Voldemort, it just didn't give that to the main characters.

If you are ok with the issues above, do read it as it still entertaining and is a story of value.

Date of Review:     09/11/2021