Yellow-chan rereads A Power Inside!

Hello everyone!

Hello.... Yes, hello..

As what you saw in the title, today, I will be rereading my book which is this one!! It's been years since I completed this book and I wanted to go down the memory lane. I will also reread A Goddess, Their Guardian after this so you better stay tune!

I will be writing down the title of the chapter and my comments about it. Without further ado, I'll start rereading!

Man, this will be a long ass book to read...

1: Graduation Day!!! Hoorayy!!

Okay, first of all, about that sun freaking light. The reason why I wrote that is because of my experience too. I usually woke up with the sun slapping my face like my curtains can't do anything at all!!

Honestly speaking, I decided Ayumi to be the Hokage's adopted child because I've read a lot of books wherein the protagonist is a traveler or a sibling of Kakashi or smthng like that.

And about that Frozen thing. I literally cringe lol. Forgive my 12 year old self. I was addicted to frozen that I could relate it in my story welp..

Lastly, the chapter is short and has plenty of skips like wtf am i doing wit my life.

2: 2 words gives special meaning...

What the heck is that flashback tho???? Liek who the fuk talks when there is a cut on her throat?? Ya girl Riku have special powers to talk when her throat is cut liek shit. You know what, let's just accept that I am still 12 at that time writing a story that I don't know if that throat thing is possible. And another short chapter for me yay! Next!3: Team 7??? SAY WHAT!!??

I love how my protagonist always gets to be late (Like in my new book A Goddess, Their Assassin better check it out *wink wonk*) it's always my forte to be late except for school though. Whenever we have meet ups with friends, I would usually go the last?? Like, the call time would be at 8 AM for example and I would leave the house by 8. 

Honestly, around this chapter, I am already having a battle with my mind whether to ship Ayumi with Naruto or Sasuke. They're my pick during these times. I haven't thought of adding moments with her of the rest of the boys.

There's this paragraph that I have to rewrite because it was so fucking lame. It's the introducing Sasuke part yeah that one. I can't remember what was the first written but I know it's ugly as hell.

I like the name of the dots too! 

And there's an ad great. 

4: Memories Fear Happiness

Right of the bat, why there's no comma in my title? Well, I don't know either.

And dang, Sasuke looks cool in that pic.

Lol I remember this chapter where I literally copy and paste the whole lyrics of the song. I have to shortened it out though because it's super lame and inconvenient.

(Uhm at this moment, I just saw a rat running up the wire of the pc and I just stare at it lmao)

I wanted Ayumi to be connected with Obito and the rest so I wrote as her cousin. It made the readers confuse but I explain it on the further chapter. And! It's the power of fanfiction! You can change some parts!

I'm getting lazy reading. I don't like long paragraphs it's making me feel dizzy.

lol I love how I made Sasuke look stupid at my story. I like it I like it.

5: The Bell Test..

Ugh, I hate the fact that there's a missing dot on the title! I wanted three periods! Not 2!

I find this chapter cliche? I dunno it's just that it's always the protagonist who gets the bells or the other way around. And Ayumi seems to be op-ish already? Though I remember her being a super op character the first time I wrote it. I change almost everything about her but ye still kinda op. She's a Mary Sue too. What do you think??

6: The C Rank Mission..

AGAIN WITH THE PERIOD!

I hate the Ear piece piece of shit pun. It's not good AT ALL!!!!!

Seriously, I really want my protagonist to be connected with the rest of the characters I swear. (Check the other two books and you'll understand)

Nothing much to say in this chapter. All good!

7: Zabuza Momochi!!!

That's a lot of exclamation points for one person huh? I maybe have a hidden desire towards Zabuza back then *snickers*

I still can't get over the duck part kekeke reminds me of Sasuke ehe... 

OH AND SIANII'S CUTE! I really like her persona. She reminds me of one of my friends. Well actually, the characters were somehow related to my friends. I don't know. I just love my friends' personalities. I must say, they are... unique.

And there goes Ayumi being an old friend of Zabuza yay.

Oh look! A dumb author who actually told that Haku looks familiar even if he has mask! GREAT JUST GREAT!

The fact that Ayumi forgot Sianii reminds me of myself whenever I forgot where I placed my phone. Yep. Totally me!

8: Tree Climbing?? Whut??

Gosh! Those question marks!

Am I obsess with fucking punctuation marks!? 

Btw, Luna looks pretty. 

HAHAHAHAHAHA OMG I LITERALLY WROTE PASSED AWAY I'M SUCH AN IDIOT HAHAHAHA 

To be honest with you, my English skills are slightly meh. I can speak but grammar? I don't think I'm not great at that. But hey, they say my accent in speaking English is good. 

That partial death *ded* I probably forget about the near death word sheesh.  

Dang girrl got some motiveees. Though I srsly wanted Ayumi and Sasuke to end together but I have better plans like another book where the OC ends up with Sasuke ya know? *wink wonk* 

This time of the year, I was so into anime. I had watched brothers' conflict then it just so happened that by that time, Asahina and Fuuto are the surnames that popped up in my mind then there you go! 

Hmm so far so good. Except for a lot of dots being used. 

9: Perfections..

Urrrggghh I MISS ANOTHER DOT! 

I'm gay for Riku *slaps*

AAAH I'M SUCH A PERVERT FOR WRITING AN AYUMI AND SASUKE MOMENT MY MIND MY SOUL MY EYES MY FINGERS MY EVERYTHING!!!

Overall, the chapter seems good? I mean it's kind of normal to have an OC fighting with Sakura. I've read at least few books where the OC likes Sakura as she is. That is why I wrote A Godess, Their Guardian as my opposite book of this wherein Kimiko likes Sakura smthng like that. Honestly, at their age, Sakura is plainly annoying for me. 

Well, even in shippuden too where she followed Sasuke and confess her fake love to Naruto... But after that, she's okay.

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10: Revenge Failed!!.. Meeting a Shiro!!

Dudeeee those punctuation marks really annoy me a lot! A LOOOOT!

I'm really annoyed by Sakura in this chapter. Well duh, I made her in that way so I should be annoyed haha.

So far, the chapter is okay? Idk there seems to be missing in some parts of my chapter and it has been edited already. I have nothing to say to this chapter because it's only about Inari, Shinjiru and stuffs yadda yadda. Though, in my mind at this moment, Shinjiru has a major role in Ayumi's life. I hope I can still give him a part in the future chapters of book two.

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So that's it for the first part. I'll be posting part 2 by idk when looool. From the first ten chapters, for a 12-year-old author who wrote a book for the first time, it's actually not that bad. 

But yeaaah, lots of cringe for me.

Peace and love,~Yellow-chan